All Comments on 'Meg's Uniform'

Meg brought the memories of Cindy and Sophies into to their love making, producing some interesting results and Meg was working on music for her band.

This is a good story but, the words just keep getting in the way. This story reminds me of the Gloria Estefan song about “The Words Get In The Way” There are too many nebulous analogies. A lot more plain language would have been a whole lot better and made it a whole lot more readable and understandable.

I think that the authors mastery of the English language is somewhat of a detriment to his/her writing ability. Don't let your language skill and your use of analogies spoil your work.