All Comments on 'My Landlord Ch. 02'

Tense, not action but the wording. Work on it & it'll flow better. It was hard to read with wrong tense in sentences, so I skimmed the rest. It did get better near the end or last half, but i suggest on getting an editor to help. If english isn't your first language, an english editor would definitely help with tenses. The english language is tricky to write in for many. Good start, keep writing.