by Fable
Anonymous, I would like to say, if you don't leave a way for the author to talk to you don't criticize. You might be right on with a problem but without a way for the author to communicate it's useless.
So have a coke and a smile, sit back and look for other stories to read, there are a lot more stories on this site you know. Maybe you'll find one that you like. However there are a large group of readers who like this story as you can see by the HOT! listing.
Gee Fable I guess I'll have to send you more ideas for future chapters, Keep up the good work.