All Comments on 'Night of the Limousine'

great story, just minimize the use of similes... otherwise very hot. How bout some dirty talk from the ladies tho?

This time around, I wanted it to be lustier, MET, good story line, and I like your visuals, you seemed very playful in this one; but I think it could be a bit bolder, you know, for those nights when one feels the need for something more saucy and racy *wink*

Interesting. A bit flowery with the similes at the beginning. Plus, I suggest consulting those helpful editors. Morse Code, rose petals, etc. are examples of homonyms misused.

Grammar aside, there were interesting variations, avoiding the cookie-cutter molds many writers use.

Oh my god. Edit this please. Its illegible