by SylviaG
Who ever wrote this pile of fucking horse manure should be. Not fit to read unless your retarded.
Whore wife get's her comeuppence but why does slag, wimp husband win with young hottie? You think he suffered enough from wife's treatment and after all his adulterous actions? Whatever.
I don't know what issues you have; but you should seek some serious counselling. Quit trying to work them out on paper because it isn't working. At least file it under non-erotic.
I usually like to encourage authors to find an editor and make their work better, but I'm not sure an editor would have helped this story. If I were one of the authors of the similar stories, I would be protesting the association.
it's not good on its own, but within the context of the gillian story, it provides some closure.
Dave trades one humiliator for another? The wife lost and a mixed race baby to boot. She really was not well liked by all concerned. That redeemed the story - in part.
Sometimes things happen to the reight people
The most disturbing thing about this story is you actually took time to write it, albeit a very short nonsense story. You still took time and actually published it, like it was worth sharing. Just grow up is all I can add.