by PHAROAHT
Lol does she not realize what makes are, well nvm she's human kinda or so she thinks
THE WHOLE STORY LINE IS INTERESTING. MAKE THEM LONGER. MORE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!
it's a good story, & i'm enjoying it though the timeline seems choppy at points. i'm curious where you'll take this.
thoughts:
1) wow, what a downer her friends are. yes, it's unconventional, but spouting doom & gloom all the time? i thought these were supposed to be positive people.
2) lytta, lytta... i thought she'd be a bit more brave with reading the letters, maybe a bit more background there so we can understand her better
You hype your reader up with 8pages for the first chp. Then you leave us hanging with the last to chp. Love story line.Just wish you would write more