All Comments on 'Pretty Persuasion'

Nicely written piece which held my attention throughout. I'll be glad to see more. Don't be afraid to go slowly, though. I, for one, would love a lot more teasing before Michelle simply abandons all.

Good action, sexy character, interesting motivations

Very well writen with good character development. Please continue to tease and build slowly.

Please continue. This is a very decent fist posting.

I just loved that story and how you balanced it out between the characters and how the temp just kept getting hotter. Keep writing.

XXXamy

Exceptionally well written. Good balance of sexual tension, character development, and story line. Leaves me haNGING, WAITING FOR MORE.USA

Wow, this is quite a hot fantasy. The story is well written, exciting, and of course gets the blood pumping. Great piece of work.

Great story line, nice character development, I hope to read more about Dave and Michelle and maybe work in Greg being controlled by Michelle as Dave controls her.

This tale got my libido working overtime. I've had several instances like the one discribed...as they say, "Been there, seen that."

Very very good. You got the right balance between surroundings and sexual act. Many just go straight to the sex witout the playing.

love the buildup, totally hot. Cant wait for chapter 2!?!?