by hunny_bee
I love the way this story is evolving, please keep it up, I can't wait to see what happens next. -StealthsKajira
i like how this story is progressing, it is indeed very cute. it has that stranger quality and appeal that we just cna't put our ifnger on. :)
Aside from the grammatical errors, your story is coming along nicely. I look forward to how you further develop your story =)
i love this story....its just so cute and sweet!!...you have to keep writing more!!
I've decidede that you have to write more immediately and post it as soon as it is written. Because this whole waiting thing and being all suspenseful, which you are great at by the way, I CAN'T WAIT!!! Great chapter.
~Amy
The grammatical errors and word usage are driving me crazy, though. Sense for since, then for than, forgivable once as a typo, but repeated use becomes a distraction. There's a really good story here, don't let it be covered up by the errors.