All Comments on 'Promotion in War Ch. 01'

I like the story-line. It has a lot of potential. My only problem would be that the whole thing seemed pretty rushed. You sort of went into giving details and a background for Marie, but there's still an "incomplete" feeling to it. Almost like a rough-draft. You've got a lot of potential though, and I can't wait to read your other works!! Let's see what happens to Marie and Caleb in part 2 :)