All Comments on 'Pussywhipped Again'

1 question...Does she swallow, TK U MLJ LV NV

You need to learn the mechanics of writing. Every time a new person speaks, a new paragraph is formed. It makes it much easier to read. I read this only because it was short, if it had been two pages I wouldn't have bothered.

Good premise, needs an editor and the tense has to stay the same (if you use present tense, use it throughout). Otherwise keep up the great work.

Ignore the other comments...your stories are some of the few that really hit it just right if you ask me. They are the sexiest stories I've read that are actually realistic.

Tbh, this site is full of people who think they're actual writers.. This, in my opinion, was a great story and people commenting on it going "Needs an editor" makes me laugh pretty hard. For example, my story didn't get approved because of poor punctuation... The punctuation was fine, just that whoever read it was a fucking moron!!

I was shocked to realize at the end on how much I liked it... keep it up

Love it. Hope you write a sequel. Would love to hear how she deals with your girlfriend.

He enjoyed it, I enjoyed it. Poor Laura. Sounds like Heather planned to keep him this time.

This was just stupid. Bitch slap her and walk away. What's she going to do? Bite him? Laughably bad.