by SeriousFool
Just a fine debut here. Very real and very well written. You must know some Korean women; you just seemed to climb inside the mind of this one. Hope we see more of your work. Kal
There was a great build up. Great read
I can't wait for chapter 2.
i think a loooooong term deal with them should be explored maybe finding out that it was her husband that couldnt have kids?
I agree with kalodin. You really did well with Seong-Hee's character - to the point, up front, and let's get to it. Do continue!
you conveyed her speech and thoughts well. I enjoyed the story very much. A very good first effort.
Maybe slow things down. Add her girlfriend @ wild times, or buddies from college. Nice story.
Great first effort! Definitely write follow-up stories to this one!
I really liked this and want to read more from you. You have sparked my interest greatly in this story.
Will she share or not?? I am wondering if she has another married friend who might be needing some extra male attention that their husband is not giving??
Please don't stop and write another chapter.
you've had a bit of a break, please continue! Interested to see where you go with things as you've left a few possibilities open. So far the only thing i would suggest is more length, short stories are just too short.