All Comments on 'Revenge is Golden Ch. 02'

"I'd hoped the passion in our lovemaking, an hour before, would completely smooth things over, but there was a trace of unease in her voice."

That's where I stopped. The first part wasn't bad - though largely unbelieveable -- but there was no "lovemaking" in it at all. Find an editor.

None of it appeals to me except the possible sexual interaction of brother and sister and it does not look as though that might happen. I might let a woman's urine run over my fingers, that's about as far as I will go, that way. No drinking urine or getting peed on except for what i just mentioned. If folks like that I have no criticism, just not for me.

Bf