All Comments on 'Rita Ch. 01'

This really needs some editing between her and his. Unless she has testicles. It was very distracting

I agree it needs some editing as some actions get confusing. Also I found the plot somehow weird and sometimes unreal, but let's give you a chance with chapter 2 so to see how do you handle the evolution of the story.

sometimes you say things like, "her testicles" and mix genders up so that it's weird to read, but dismissing that and correcting mentally makes it a good story.