All Comments on 'Sabina'

This is an interesting (if implausible) story, ruined by pathetic writing. For starters, pick a verb tense and stick with it!

-- KK in Texas

all she had to do was ask him to be hers.major law firm don't deal in slavery of their employee.in writing common sense is important.

You really need an editor, truly.

As an educated Paralegal, I feel sorry for the dumb-assed legal beagle that hires your ineptness. His court of law paperwork must be pathetic!

People, he's Swedish, okay? You try writing in a second language; let's see how you do.

1) He's a foreign writer. Let's see you hypocrites write a grammatically correct story in a nordic dialect with correct verb tenses on your first few goes. Actually, I'd settle for how many of you actually remember anything beyond asking how to go to the bathroom in whatever language you took for a few years in high school.

2) It's a fantasy. That's what erotica stories are, fantasies. They don't have to be realistic, and if he wants a world where slavery contracts are legal, so be it.

3) Show me a major law firm that -doesn't- treat first year junior associates like glorified errand boys, -and- show me a same first year junior associate that would have the cajones to actually read over something that his boss said "take to this important client to sign, and sign as the witness". If you don't suspect, you don't read, especially when you're trying in a hurry to impress and it's already labeled with tab stickers as who's to sign and where.

Good read.

I love this story.

Multiple Choice Question:

Syntax? Mixed tenses? Punctuation? Word errors?

Correct Answer: All of the above