All Comments on 'Sarah'

Sammie,

What a brief but lovely little story. Tenderly told, with so much love and affection. You must have had an inspiration for this one. Congratulations on your first story. You are a welcome addition Sammie. Looking forward to reading more of your wonderful work. Best Wishes!

Duddle

A good start. An editor would have probably caught the three oops I saw. When you write again I recommend an editor to you. For me the story is good but too short. We don't identify with Sarah or David because we don't know much about them.