All Comments on 'School isn't All Work Ch. 02'

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Tail End PeteTail End Peteover 18 years ago
Not long enough!!

C'mon here. One page is all you've got? I know you can do better than that, so next chapter will have at least a page 2 at the bottom. Flesh out the story with some side details. The sex seemed to be the point for this story. Try starting a new series using sex as an accenting spice and see where you are when you finish. Good job and a fine read. Thank you for your effort.

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
nice picture

good start I like your picture helps to envision you in your story is it autobiographic

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