Second Best

Epic Fail... I am not a big fan of RAAC stories in general...but I do appreciate a RAAC in which an author has built a quality foundation for the RAAC conclusion with proper foreshadowing and proofs of suspended veracity,,, This, unfortunately is not one of those tales... In fact the author spends the ENTIRE four pages of the tale portraying the wife as a serial cheater to the eventual husband throughout her life to her original boyfriend, Further, she spends an entire year hobnobbing and frankly seducing her old boyfriend who now works with her and says ABSOLUTELY NOTHING to her fricking husband about it. Further, the wimp husband leaves her...gets his new job...and suddenly in a classic Deux Ex Machina off stage entrance...the newly repentant wife shows up at his office spouting her undying love and telling the wimp husband that the entire year was simply her revenge plot on the bad boy ex boyfriend for cheating on her...

These kind of blatant Deux ex Machina fixes really don't fix anything... rather they utterly BREAK the entire logic train of the story into such a chaotic mess that the average reader is forced to try to figure out the mess themselves...that single action is the most fatal error that an author can make because it causes the author to fail to convince the reader to properly suspend disbelief.... With that failure...the entire tale unravels into chaos...and thus you see all the negative comments from reviewers.

The real problem here is sloppy organization and absolutely no real use of proper foreshadowing to support the RAAC conclusion.... In short this one is an EPIC FAIL...

2 stars

Itisamazingthe power she has over him. From the start shefooledhim, cheated on hi., made him no more than a stupid puppy, a pudimin her hands. And he loves being the cuck. Man up, sissy.

I will agree with some of the complaints, for my own reasons. Grace's account was cockamamie. It could be true in the way that a Lucy Arnaz account would be true in "I Love Lucy," if sex were involved. Rob never bothered to check anything out with mutual friends and workers. He knew--based on their long history-- that Grace was a bad prospect, and even went so far as to divide their assets and disappear. But then -- he allowed her to come back to his place and decided after a little claims-making on her part that she just "felt" right. What if he had tried this: "Okay, darling, prove that your months of double dealing behind my back had motives as pure as the driven snow. Fully explain why you wouldn't trust your life partner. Prove it. Or at least make the effort. Line up your testimony and evidence. Show how such a record of sneaking around should lead to more, rather than less trust on my part." That would help. My own stories have a well-earned reputation for having a bias in favor of reconciliation. This certainly could go that way with a little work. If my wife were Lucy Riccardo this could go one way easily. Still, "trust but verify" as a recent president put the matter.

That said -- this is in many ways a great story, well told and well-written, deserving at least a '4' IMHO.

I think many here underestimate the author. Yes it does not please everyone, but the characters are just "normal" each of us has his ideal image of himself in mind, how he will behave in a situation. Exactly planned, every detail worked out ... for years.

But what happens when you really have to "live" this moment ? do you manage to control the feelings that overwhelm you at that moment or do you give in to your impulses and just act without sticking to the "plan" ?

The kisses in this case were in any case too much, and the woman would have to cope with an extreme performance on her knees sliding so that I would forgive her .... if feelings for her were still present ... would she have managed to eliminate them ? Just like the MC here on and off and Fuck u2

He has to be the dumbest shit in town, to believe her story.