All Comments on 'She Turned Me Down For Cheesecake'

Your right, it needs a bit of a back story to put it in context. Your reader finally realizes they are communicating via computers and likely quite distant from each other. He is a bit unhappy with his marriage and she seems quite content with her relationship, so is this all there is?

It's missing something on the front end without a doubt. Your writing is good with all the mechanics and that'll keep the idiot grammar/spelling nazis away.

You need to recapture what should have been chapter #1 and do a total re-write or add a prologue. Find some assistance from one of the resident experts on here for guidance and maybe some future editorial advice if it becomes necessary.

Keep writing you've got skills.

A good read. Takes a bit of thinking about who is talking to whom and what they are doing. I liked that.

A little different, no more backstory is needed.