All Comments on 'She Wasn't Supposed to be There'

Something about this whole story seemed really minimalistic to me, but in this instance it felt like less is more. The simplicity of it really brought emphasis to every little part, but that also means it brought emphasis to every mistake as well. Certain things seemed to have been glossed over a lot, and I felt like there could have been at least a little more atmosphere put into it as well. I also found it somewhat odd that the girl remained very vague and neutral throughout the whole story, almost like a ragdoll. Then again, I've had a partner like that myself so it's not exactly unrealistic.