All Comments on 'South Mountain Pack Ch. 01'

Nice chapter, the large family or pack seem to get along really well. When the other family relocate there I wonder if all the females will find mates in the South Mountain Pack.

such an amazing start cant wait for the next chapter ur story is really good cant wait to find out whats really going on with the pack and the difference between the birth ratios love how you tied that in. already lovin Anthony's character ...............DONT STOP KEEP'EM COMIN

Love it!!!

Great start, can't wait to read more. =)

10 males 10 females mmmm cowinydinky

The beginning is great... I hope no one will get between Anthony and Sophia, Sophia will be friends with new girls, new girls as mates with her brothers...but i am probably being too optimistic

Really enjoyed this, Cant wait till the next chapter. Very promising

On your first submission to Lit. I think it's a great first chapter. You mentioned several things that are original to your story and I look forward to reading more.

I wanted to thank hcsd1719 for his help in editing this story and for providing me much needed encouragement and support. I have already submitted Chapter 2, which is the talk in Franks man cave. I also wanted to thank everybody for their encouraging comments, they are greatly appreciated.

You have my attention. I'll be looking for chapter two to post. :) keep up the great work to what I am sure will be an amazing story.

Can't wait for the next chapter! A very promising story

Please do not leave us waiting long! I am hooked!

This a wonderful story n has my attending of wanting more. Plz dnt keep us waiting for the next chapter's!!!

Great start! I am looking forward to your next chapter. Please dont keep us waiting too long.......

soo....can you continue the story...please?

Great start!!!!! This is so cute....please continue it!!!!!!!!!

I TRULY ENJOYED YOUR STORY. I DON'T MEAN TO RUSH YOU BUT CHAPTER 2 PLEASE. CAN'T WAIT TO SEE HOW THE STORY PRECEDE WITH THE KIDS AND THEIR PARENTS ALONG WITH THE 10 NEW GIRLS THAT ARE GOING TO BE MOVING IN. I SEE MANY STORIES FROM YOU IN THE FUTURE. GOOD LUCK. WELCOME ABOARD.

P.S. DON'T LET THE READERS HERE SCARE YOU OFF. SOME CAN BE VERY ABUSIVE WITH THEIR CRITIQUES WHILE OTHERS WILL JUST LOVE THE STORY WITHOUT CRITIQUING ANY ERRORS.

Great story, hope to read the next few chapters soon.

Perfect humor at good time, I busted out laughing alot. Dickweed, too funny. Look foward to more.

I was hooked after dickwad lol! Please don't make me wait long!

great story i cant wait yo read more

I'm falling in love with this story & I can hardly wait to read what happens next ^_^

i love the possessiveness that Anthony shows for sophia. it was a great story. i want read more of this story. and soon!

Ive already checked for updates twiece today cant wait for more.

More soon please. Please don't make us wait to long.

Thank you everyone for your positive comments and feedback. Chapter 2 was declined because of a formatting issue, but it has been resubmitted, hopefully it will post within the next couple of days. Thanks again.

I love the first chapter its great cant wait to read the next one.....

I love it can't wait for chapter 2! Please hurry!

when is chapter 2 coming out?! I've been going crazy not knowing what happens!

Chapter 2 please come fast!!!

More please more.

Just re read for the third time, love it

Def cannot wait for the next chapters great back story!

It's just way to much to be believable.

wonderful

I think I have almost the entire series memorized but the pairing on names is what's throwing me off.... love the whole story line... keep it up!!!!

By the way my Sicilian family is much like the Clan and the Wild Scottish is totally defends the little women even though we rule the house...

I've been dodging this story for months and I don't know why.

This introduction of the families was perfect and I found myself laughing at times in this story.

I'm now hooked.

-nadaliw

I've had this story on line for forever and just hasn't read it but I'm glad that at nearly four in the morning I decided to start, I like it thanks to insomnia I'm moving on to chapter two

I don't know how I have missed this for so long. Loved the introduction and the family dynamics are amazing but well written. Onto the next chapter

And I demand that you write more! LOL! I came back to read how everyone fits in again and clicked! The Carlucci's have fourteen kids all together - seven pairs of twins: Frank and Rose have four pairs (Vincent & Dominic; Gianni & Marcus; Enzo & Gino and Salvatore & Sophia) and Joe and Annie have three pairs (Lorenzo & Damian; Paulo & Michael and Victor & Maria). Got it now! Now get writing xoxo

.... that grows up with a band of older brother be shy, let a lone "extremely" shy?

Also, why would someone who grows up around shape shifters be shy about nudity? That's just a very human projection that doesn't fit the concept of shapeshifters at all.

Doesn't make sense to me.

And if packs in different areas suddenly start to have mostly male or female offspring, then that shouldn't be a problem, after all, with cars, telecommunication etc meeting of suitable candidates for mating can be arranged without much trouble. Case closed.

If all Were stories had the same concepts and story line there would be no reason for new stories to be written, posted and ultimately discussed.

Just because she feels comfortable around her large family doesn't mean she feels comfortable around others. She is 15, an extremely awkward age for most girls as they are developing into the women they will become. The issue with nudity will be discussed later, everything the Pack does is to protect the girls and there is a reason for it.

I had to laugh at your 'Case Closed' argument. You've solved everything, no need to read further and find out why it's happening, or anything else that's going on.

PBL

Case closed my ass! Like PBL said if all Were stories had the same concept then that would be boring!! This isn't twilight ok? Nothing is written in stone & as the author of her awesome world, PBL has the right to depict her characters in whatever fashion she sees them as capice? Sheesh! Keep up the good work PBL!! Ignore the riffraff!

N.M.Afalava

5 Stars I'm hooked could hardly stop reading to go to work

Unlike the person before me, I nearly ripped my eyes out several times and had to stop reading about a hundered times, because of how- how- AHHHHH

I can't. I can't even.

It's good, but good, it's full on.

I mean, GEEZ Anthony!!!

I know she's your mate, but cool it, dude!!

Hope PBL gets well and can continue it. Was 1 of my first stories on here and still remains a favorite..So much so have read and reread it several times now...

I love this story so much...i know its a glitch but its one of my favorites..so tired of the cliche werewolf stories on all the other sites...love love love this story

I love this storyline. I hope the author is feeling better soon. I have enjoyed all the stories to date.

Thank you for a great imaginative book! I hope you start feeling better and that you're able to post another chapter soon.

This is my third time reading the story. I'm in love with it and I can't wait for you to finish it. Hope you get better soon. Xx

Rest In Peace

Not appropriate pal is recovering from being ill and does not need comments like that

This was horrible. I'm sorry the author is ill or have already passed. RIP can't believe this trash is their legacy tho.

Ok, I'm gonna try to keep an open mind here. I'm not trying to bash on the writing, but the characters highly lack individuality. I understand that there are a TON of characters introduced quickly, but they are so so very stereotypical and at times robot like(the girls only care about material things, boys are robotic and move as one, seems very unnatural and or fake). Or that's the feel I got from them. I am intrigued enough to keep reading in hopes that's individual characterstics come thru. I mean with there being so many characters, there needs to be things that differs them from each other or it just makes for a boring and unrealistic read. Again, not trying to bash. *Fingers crossed*