All Comments on 'Tattoed Passion Ch. 02'

why do u leave me with so much suspense plz dont take so long to write again this time i am so going to be waiting!!!!!!!

OoO Give us more! This series is seriously addicting!

WELL MUDDA SICK DREAD. IT WAS GETTING SO GOOD PLEASE CONTINUE...

MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

"Chapters" one and two should have been one chapter.

You really need to proof read your work. Too many simple mistakes that detract from the story. Even your dialog needs work. It's not bad, but it's the small mistakes that get you.

Every time you change speakers you need to start a new paragraph.

Make sure you have the correct endings on your verbs. And, when using a well worn phrase (E.G. "a vision in white" rather than "in a vision of white") use it properly.

Good idea, decently written over all, just needs work. It really is the little things that bite you in the ass as a writer. I know.