All Comments on 'The ABC Game Ch. 05'

I've enjoyed each chapter in this series. Great writing, great pace, great premise. I've tried to think of something to offer as a critique, but you seem to be doing so well, I finally gave up. If, instead, I can make a request, I'd like to see if you can work Becca into story. Jennifer has already had a taste of woman-on-woman sex, so it doesn't seem like it would be too difficult to arrange.

Of course, considering that fact, I wouldn't be surprised if the thought hadn't already crossed your mind.

"You can cut out the act you know." Karen said to Jennifer after I left. - How do you know what is said after you have left?

Other than that... 5 stars... for the whole series!

Story is good, action paced.

Watch capitalization. jen or Jen?

Watch repetition: "Once she was beside me she made sure both of us were covered again, and settled in beside me."