All Comments on 'The ABC Game Ch. 05'

Story is good, action paced.

Watch capitalization. jen or Jen?

Watch repetition: "Once she was beside me she made sure both of us were covered again, and settled in beside me."

"You can cut out the act you know." Karen said to Jennifer after I left. - How do you know what is said after you have left?

Other than that... 5 stars... for the whole series!

I've enjoyed each chapter in this series. Great writing, great pace, great premise. I've tried to think of something to offer as a critique, but you seem to be doing so well, I finally gave up. If, instead, I can make a request, I'd like to see if you can work Becca into story. Jennifer has already had a taste of woman-on-woman sex, so it doesn't seem like it would be too difficult to arrange.

Of course, considering that fact, I wouldn't be surprised if the thought hadn't already crossed your mind.