All Comments on 'The Break Room'

by Tween2Legs

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
characters need names and/or descriptions

When both protagonists are only referred to as "she", the reader can't tell one from the other. If you can't think of names to give them, then at least differentiate them by giving a physical description of each (for example: refer to one as "the blonde" and the other as "the brunette").

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Agree with previous comment

Confusing as hell from beginning to end - can't tell who's doing what to whom.

NC22371NC22371over 9 years ago
Confusion

I Agree, in fact I only read up to the point where "no, not yet" is located. Find a way to define the characters

SpreadHerCheeksAndFeast1SpreadHerCheeksAndFeast1over 9 years ago
Taste the tail.

After all that, a thorough sniffing and tongue fucking of her asshole would have been grand.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
envy

I love giving a woman pleasure like that. I love to feel her throbbing when she cums in my mouth.

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