All Comments on 'The Chemical Pt. 03'

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Pikerwulf over 9 years ago

STOP!!!!!!!!!!!!

Get someone to EDIT your crap. It is terrible writing. Throw your keyboard away NOW!

joejacks over 9 years ago

definitely hard work to follow, though it is better than anything I could create. the basic story has promise but it does need help to make it read better

rg27612 over 9 years ago

were their legs broken?

Grabbing their crutches? Maybe crotch was the word you were looking for.

Suave? As in the shampoo? Or coolness? Or... maybe you meant salve....

Couldn't force myself to read any more of this pathetic work to find out the answers to the above questions.

Dear God! Get an editor!

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First time writing one of these. Enjoy writing stories which always turn out as novels. Long winded I guess. I am retired from transportation industry. My early works are filled with errors miss spelling and poor paragraph formation. I tend to concentrate on the story more tha...

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