All Comments on 'The Coin Pt. 01'

Nice start

Just wondering.

Now that he has had pussy he needs to get Cash to live on and Maybe set up a Harem. and get back at Past Back Stabbers.

Could've had a liiiittle bit more content-wise, but I'm very excited for the rest of this series!

I'm looking forward to the adventure of what all he can get into.

and has forgotten that everything has a price.

the first price might be losing Ann/Amy.

I fear he is about to get his own bell rung.

looooooooooooooooooooooooooovvvvvvvveeee itttt

This is a super minor nitpick, but as a fan of Latin, the phrases on the coin are a bit messed up:

Omnia habet pretium - The price has everything (Pretium is also not a common way to say price.) A better way of saying it would be Omnia aestumationem suum habent (Latin is also traditionally SOV format, rather than SVO like English.)

Cave cordis tui - Beware of the heart of you. Cordis is in the genitive, which is not used for objects of verbs. As such, the correct form would be Cave cordem tui (Beware the heart of you), or even better Cave cordem tuum (Beware your heart).

That entire "you can't see me" routine is so VERY BORING. All that power and sad little mind want to be invisible and ineffective. Jesus, when that's your fantasy, you're a lost cause.