All Comments on 'The Game'

Nice story and good job telling it. Thanks!

I love this story, nice concept and written well, can't wait to read more of your submissions.

I would have liked to know the reason for this story: the "headnote" said that she needed the money, but "how much" and "why" and "how did she find the people who paid her."

Otherwise: well written.

fun story, and very hot at the end! too bad he didn't get her ass!

Your characters were just right, the pacing and building intensity were great and the ending was perfect. However, the spelling and grammar errors were just annoying enough ruin an otherwise tremendous read. May I suggest you take advantage of the volunteer editors available on this site?