by HamSwift
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Thanks. Hamilton Swift
I enjoyed Heather's Honeymoon, was frustrated when it ended, and look forward to this story developing further.
Since authors in this site don't want critiques, I will only give it a 50% for the beginning and leave it at that.
This needs to be retooled and a longer version released, one with an actual plot, dialogue and a sense of direction.