All Comments on 'The Vampire King: She's His'

I would have given you a 100, but there were quite a few of grammer mistakes. Im glad, that you did try to make it longer--so lots of props for that :). Want to try and beat this chapter and make the next one even longer? lol.

Well goodluck with the next chapter. I can't wait to read it.

Writing is improving. Really though, a condom? Seems silly. Do they make them in super human sizes? The thought that Tristan would have an STD is offputting, and he's already consumed her blood. Put her on the pill, patch - anything if you're trying to address the pregnancy issue.

Omg i freakin love this story.ugh!!!cant wait for another chapter

I loved this!

What's up with arttie

he a vampire?

Ooo can't wait for some angry jealous vampire scenes

There is not much to recommend this story so far. RAPE - it´s quite illogical that this Vampire King is going to make the stupid female character going to love him by forcing himself on her with all kind of threats.

It seems to me that this author has not thought through the whole story thoroughly enough but just puts together a posting once in a while. If you want readers to like your story/ies you have to think more....

your improving with every story, keep at it!

side note:loose the condom, unless vamps can get you preggo! good luck!

i reeaally like this story , i really with youl would write more though

This is great. Is the next chapter going to be out soon? Please continue, I have to know what happens now.

More please

i loved this story.. such a shame and waste you threw it away..trs

I wish you had continued this story