All Comments on 'The Warden'

Try harder. (again yawns...)

No dialog makes for a boring story. Maybe break it into more paragraphs, amp up the sex, and use "quotes" for dialog.

Real dialogue isn't that hard to do here, but apparently, it is. Confusing to readers when there are no quotation marks; readers do not know who is speaking, or to whom. Rather distracting. I could not finish past the second paragraph. My 4th grader knows how to use quotation marks during dialogue.

feels like reading a literature

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