All Comments on 'The White Wolf 02'

i'm not usually onbnoxious and i won't sign this anonymously, but I have to say i'll read it b/c it's disappointing to me but crazy enough that i want to know where in the hell you're going with it. why tell these stories of these mates being killed together. Also, if you're going to go that way, then have some wolves give an explanation as to why they are killing these pairs. the first seemed to be by the order of the existing alpha. There is no rule that gay mated alphas can't exist, so why would the pack do the same again? For what reason. They had seen all those wolves die for no reason and would attack another pair which they have a legend about? They wouldn't pause to think it through without an alpha there to say 'do this'? just wondering

Done reading something where the author can't be bothered to actually fill in the blanks or answer their readers questions!

What is your point? You just like kill ing off gay werewolves as a hobby?

Hey keep going with your story.. I know many ppl complaining 'coz u'r killing off pairs but I really want to know what will make the the pack stop the killings.. I keep ur chapter00 as a sort of guide/key for ur story. U clearly mentioned Elders omitting part of mates not being accepted which would be crucial for peaceful wolf world.

All I can say..keep going!

:)

This story is all of the place not to be mean but maybe you should start over it probably it was better in your head and u put pen 2 paper and we r reading that product which is not good. But keep writing I cannot write a Damm

Okay. I think I know what you're trying to do here, and I have a few suggestions. Backstory is good, lets us know what started the whole thing. Jumping in on both chapters so suddenly is a little disconcerting when it's not followed by much. It was a little better in #2 when you ended it with Marie finding her mate and a comment about the moon, if you're going to have more chapters like these, might want to expand on that, how the moon watches and mourns or something like that; kind of remind people of the beginning.

Overall, I think this has great potential and I look forward to the rest of the tale. Good luck.

chaz

I agree with chaz' comment here below. This really has a lot of potential in terms of progression and it would be nicer if it is expanded with more emotions, and possibly some third party for enlightenment for the pack members. The pack members' priorities and prejudice are unfair (pertaining to the part about them killing off gay alphas but swallowing down their pride to accept a female hetero one), but I think can see where you're going with this. Sooner or later, if this would be following the legend, then those packs are in big trouble. They've only encountered 2 black-white wolf couples, and they're already down 70+ pack members. Someone should really thump them one before they go extinct. Haha!

If I wasn't depressed before reading this I bloody would be afterwards. What is it with all the death in it. What about some happy ever afters?