by cddannie18
I'm sick and tired of the same crap, over and over. I don't mind T-girl stories, I like a few even, but the majority are the same rewashed/rehashed; Guy is wimpy and has a flea-dick, Girl is (over)dominating and has a BIG dick (although praise is due to you for not making your T-girl part-horse).
No one wants to write anything differently, and its brassing a few of the people I talk to on this site off.
If you want to talk post a message on the page and i'll send an e-mail directly.
So you take the same bullshit scenario put some new characters in there and write it again. Some fucking achievement. Ya hoo.
Could use a little refinement but that was fucking hot. Now I need to find myself a sexy dominant yoga instructor.
"a momentary desire to be pregnant" occurs as her "hot seed" shoots into his bowels. What utter rubbish! The rest isn't much either.
don't pay any attention to the nay-sayers....i liked it......write more
Listen to the Wolf, ignore the naysayers write what you want to write. I liked it think it could benefit from a part 2.
It COULD benefit from a part 2, especially of part 2 was just blank empty space like this should have been!
If I had to guess, I'd say the anon haters are the same anons that praise the sissy stories.
Cddannie, it's a little rough in places and slightly heavy on the tropes, but not terrible either. "Promising" is the term, I think. Keep writing.
...As an erotic story of a Dom MTF Trans, and it has many pleasant parts, along with its share of errors (tho I haven't heard the term 'trope' used since my medieval studies course years ago, touche). It could have used a second set of eyes to catch these lil probs. I sent you a msg dannie, a volunteer editor may help, but I hope you will continue writing in any case, as I do think this shows promise. Water was an excellent form to use as an erotic 'enabler', in other words I thought you chose well for your setting and do not understand the complaints of re-use... although honestly I can't follow the args given by ANONs at all. Thanks for sharing this story, and hope to see more from you. Cheers! --- Josie
I like the story, the setting and the characters. Mainly the writing is the problem for me. Too many mistakes, not the best pacing or descriptions, weird choice of words here and there and basically it just seems like you wrote this in an hour or two without re-reading even once.
You've got a good base and good potential. Keep on writing and you'll improve as you go on and get an editor and you'll be fine :)
So if your reading this story your probably jacking off and if yoh can't cum too this then you are not a CD or a admirer
Hi,
I love yoga, it is a real turn on. The flexibility makes it more fun to masturbate my erect penis in different poses. Once an instructor assisted one of my stretches and I had a clear view up his shorts and caught a full glimpse of his semi-hard penis and tight scrotum. I shifted a little and my finger tips darted into his shorts and brushed along the length of his entire shaft. I know he wanted me to because he did not pull away. I was happy.
Thanks for the tgirl story!
i felt like that guy and so horny but surprised that she is a trans and that it would to late to save my cherry ass with her around. very hot story
I enjoyed this story a little twisted in certain spots and that can be cleaned up. FOR ALL OF YOU THAT ARE ANONYMOUS AND OVER CRITICAL PUT YOUR FUCKING NAME ON YOUR ACCOUNT AND STOP BEING PUSSY'S ABOUT IT. AFRAID YOUR SIGNIFICANT OTHER MIGHT FIND OUT THAT YOUR COMMENT ON HERE SO YOU REMAIN ANONYMOUS. BULLSHIT.
i for one would like to read another chapter so i hope you write again soon ,xo.
This was a wonderful way to lose your virginity. I look forward to reading more.