by teranmc
The punctuation mistakes were making my head ache! An editor would be an idea.
The "angel" didn't know what the feeling was in her nether region but she knew what her clit was?
Totally sad but you gave it a try!
Except for a few mistakes, this will be a story worth reading and adding to my favs list. I am looking forward to mre real soon.
I'm really enjoying this story. Please continue and soon. You have a great imagination.
I don't know why my editor's name wasn't on here I did put it. So I would now like to give a special THANK YOU to Jassi. An amazing person going to school and dealing with me I don't know where you find the time. Thank you to everyone who left a comment I have lots more in store for you.
Would love to read more on this,,another chaper or 4 the birth and what becomes of them....needs a few more chapters for sure,lol,,,Just to give it a proper ending,,thanks
you are writing a wonderful story and thats why i think you should get an editor to help you with your english.
This could be a great series!!! Please write more and keep up the great work. I agree and I gave ya five stars-!!!!!
Wrote beautifully, with an original and interesting storyline. Please continue because this was great, a real 5 star piece!