by bbmaniac2002
After ten years it's probably unlikely that you'll read this comment. However, if you do... This is a well-written story and I've given you five stars on that basis. However, given the serious tone of the story, I think that it's far too short, abrupt almost. With a bit of careful planning, character building and drama you could have run to several pages (this site sized pages) and the tale would have been all the better for it. As it is, Mya and Sydney are little more than cardboard cut-outs whereas they could have been fully rounded and believable characters.
I loved reading this story, it is a great tale. I just wish it was longer but that does not take away from how good it is.
scores to people or stories he reads and then tells us he hates them. He must be a rejected retarder asshole . Yep, he is.
no need to waste any more words.. its boring as watching paint dry
this is more like a horror story than a erotic story i lked the romantic side but wheres the in depth sex session!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The only explanation is that someone has deliberately driven it down.
It is a loving story--Possibly though it belongs under romance