All Comments on 'Your Domination'

That was a great story, I actually cried reading some parts of it.very romantic and sensual and loving. please write more.

loved the ending, was an excellent way to end the story...probably the only way....can't wait for more of your work.

For a first timer its a great effort. Keep writing.

thought it was good....could be better.....work on it. Spelling got me caught up a bit.....correctness makes for better flow.

That was a good story but the spelled out sound effects were a bit extreme and actually had me laughing ate some points. Yeah and he is the nicest Dom I have ever seen.

For a first story I guess it's okay, but I found it more funny than erotic. Really, I laughed out loud. Might I suggest that you try to get an editor? Thank you for the read.