All Comments on 'Your First Submission'

This should be required reading for not only Dominants.. but vanilla husbands & lovers as well. What a difference such a "how-to" would make!!

If only I could find someone to do this to me...oh so hot,E..

Fantastic! Made me feel like I was really there. Please DON'T STOP!

This is a wonderful how to..... I hope you write more....

I felt like I was there and this was happening to me, it was very good. I can't wait to read more, keep it up.

There was plenty of detail but no heat in this story. It is clinical and detatched. Some of the euphemisms used were laughable. Try again.

I loved the language you used in this; no "plunged into her sex" etc. It made me feel like I was there, having all of these wonderful things done to me. I also love the anticipation aspect of this story. Keep writing!

A powerful poetic expression that left me tingling and electrified....it made me feel like I was her going thru every luscious moment of her submission. I have a question for you Excearulo....May I go with you on your next trip to Disneyland?

I can't wait to read more, you definitely have a new fan in me.

Gypzie

i love chocolate and this story!

I very much enjoyed most of this submission! Gave me a little "aha!" moment about BDSM - something I've not really explored much. The idea of an ejaculate-free orgasm was a complete surprise! LOL! I look forward to more writing by this author, excearulo!

booklover

Well written! Makes a girl want to stock up on chocolate. Rave on! Oh and me next please.

though it somewhat reads like an anatomy book, i enjoyed it. it would have been better if i didn't have to stop to think "wait, what's a perenium?"

Nicely written.

I know they are two different parts of the body, but the words cunt and perineum just should never appear in the same text. It's just wrong! Seriously, though I agree that some of it sounds like a medical journal. WTF is a Skene's gland? The plot was good, but the awkward use of language made it less passionate than it could be.

i really hate it when people use medical terms in erotica. use sleezy slang or common terminology.

but med words? Come on! Get dirty with it!

I am so wet. I am soooooo wet. I have to go fill myself with something or I'll pass. The fuck. Out. Been following the "don't come unless you're called" rule, even now, and my pussy is such a little hold-it-back slut she's gonna get spanked!

That just made me sooo fucking wet!

Wow this is beautiful

Regarding the use of medical terms, please keep in mind that I originally wrote this for a nurse!