All Comments on 'The Muse Ch. 01'

Wish my wife was a friend of hers!

This needs to be retooled and a longer version released, one with an actual plot, dialogue and a sense of direction.

Since authors in this site don't want critiques, I will only give it a 50% for the beginning and leave it at that.

I enjoyed Heather's Honeymoon, was frustrated when it ended, and look forward to this story developing further.

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Thanks. Hamilton Swift

This story is in no way a musing. Just another cheating whore tale.