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where are all the 'sailing references'?....
The only reference to sailing was a boat, well, OK, 2 boats.
Besides all the periods that are missing (way beyond 'run on sentences'), the point of the story seems to be missing also.
This is only the first chapter of a story.
The story will unfurl in future chapters rendering the title and apology appropriate.
Sorry if this wasn't clear to you.
Potential
The set up lends itself to a reat story. I look forward to it.
Good start
Hope the next chapter develops this story as it has potential
Next Instalment!
Make it quick, lady, this is going to be a good ride. Sorry, 'sail'...anyway, I'm sure we will all enjoy the rocking boat...
great start!
I'm having a hard time visualizing what the characters look like, but the groundwork has been laid for a fine vacation!
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