All Comments on 'Morgan's Mistakes Ch. 01'

Can't decide on a tense, dialog is wooden, just a mess.

Editor time.

Feels like the writing is rushed

Chills run down her spine as she rises up and Chris grabs both of her breasts. They fill up his powerful hands easily, boobs big enough where he can give a rough squeeze. Groping gently with his fingertips, Morgan bites John's ear and whispers: "I won't fuck you tonight, but maybe I can make up for it."