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Paul4playPaul4playover 2 years ago

Oh my….

This is intimate and intensely sensual!

Many lines of significance, with his one capturing me:

“The moment between pain and nothing when I can almost taste life.”

Auden JamesAuden Jamesabout 2 years ago
The Terror of Feeling Nothing

That's, at least to my mind, the central phrase here: the hunger to fill an emotional void left by—well, what exactly? That answer is not given, but the question suggests itself. Indeed, a thought-provoking piece of writing!

Alas, I wouldn't consider it poetry as such as it is just too loosely structured and written. It could do well, I think, with either being edited down to a more rigorous form or being expanded into a piece of unabashedly introspective prose.

—AJ

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I deeply appreciate everyone who has taken the time to read my stories, especially those who comment. I love to hear if my words have connected with you in any way. While there have been many requests for sequels to specific stories, and these inevitably spark ideas, I tend ...