All Comments on 'Holding On To You'

Yeah, I can understand where you're coming from. Plagiarism sucks. ;) As far as the poem goes... show, don't tell. For example, you tell the reader that you never took the traditional path and you gave up long ago. You write about time apart and sadness. But I don't feel any of it. Show me something. Give me examples, descriptions. Sadness is abstract. Someone curled on their blue bed, hair clinging to cheeks as if tears are glue is a concrete image. I can see the sadness.