All Comments on 'Hurdles'

too personal for the public, just a few comments,i.e. a "hurdle" is not crossed, it is jumped, you may cross a river but you must jump a hurdle or else foul out which does not seem your message; also,

"Our souls

Are at peace

And we find

That final happiness

That rests

In US"

I imagine "US" should be "us", otherwise you are talking location. However these lines add a funerary note that I am not sure you wish to convey. Also, it is perhaps unfounded to refer to one's self as the true love of an absent party. It is more becoming to have that person make that claim but we all live in hope.....

(I'm assuming this is a chick) seems a little off balance...have you read her other stuff? This might all be in her head...no offense to you, dear author. Your stuff is... humorous, but seriously, girlfriend, I think you may need to take some deep breaths and think about something else for awhile. Try writing poems about trees or clouds or something not quite so...cliche.

Apparently neither of you have ever found true love. I promise you he is as real as - as real as - anyone else you've ever met. He just doesn't talk to me right now. But that doesn't mean he's not real. And it doesn't mean I'm not his true love. Just because he hasn't exactly told me I am doesn't mean it's not true, it just means - it just means he hasn't had the chance to yet. You gotta have faith.

You're right though, hurdles should be jumped, I should have thought of that, sorry for the mistake.