by foehn2
this is a fine poem and a great way to tell the story.
Thanks for sharing it at last.
Excellent work with the wording and skillful repetition of those four words. Can feel the ambiguity of love in this blues-tinged piece.
I loved it very, yes very very much. Cut and paste ,in a haste, to my private list of course. Thanks!
A bold statement, but delivers. I don't understand why you used the stanza breaks - but I defer to the better poet. Easily the best I've read today.
I liked the way your poetic exploration seemed random but the language maintained a rhythm throughout. The stanzas appeared natural in this context.