by foehn2
I liked the way your poetic exploration seemed random but the language maintained a rhythm throughout. The stanzas appeared natural in this context.
A bold statement, but delivers. I don't understand why you used the stanza breaks - but I defer to the better poet. Easily the best I've read today.
I loved it very, yes very very much. Cut and paste ,in a haste, to my private list of course. Thanks!
Excellent work with the wording and skillful repetition of those four words. Can feel the ambiguity of love in this blues-tinged piece.
this is a fine poem and a great way to tell the story.
Thanks for sharing it at last.