All Comments on 'Stones'

Very lovely carving you've made here.

Really liked where you took it, Todski

If you carve your name in stone , it may still decay

But if you imprint your name in the hearts of people

It will forever endure 'n stay !

I liked the word play, tod, and the interspersing of the rhymes with the short lines gave it a cadence I liked, what felt like persistence until the chipping away produced the vision one has of beauty. I wouldn't have used "chaff," maybe rubble.

Comment in the POBO. Agree that chaff does not fit with masonry in any shape or form. understand why you used it. It's been a long time since the first of yours I've seen, one involving carpentry if I remember correctly. Words can be wood or water or air or any number of things, but I think that words have become life to you... to us all in fact. idk. chip away, sand, breathe, drink... write.

I don't know if I agree

however if it makes sense to you, writer always takes preference

regarding the poem, it is an old troupe, but you are a new writer, and it it not that ordinary

5ed

Nothin'. I liked it and chaff worked for me.