All Comments on 'The Graybeard's Sonnet'

....and, to answer your question, yes, definitely erotic.

just one niggle, I would prefer "warm" to "hot" in line four. Kudos, AH, it is good to read you again.

This is GP

The meter is, I think, a little too motoric and the language is slightly archaic (making it read a bit stiffly), but perhaps that is part of your point (about aging). It's unclear whether this is about a lover from long ago or one you encountered more recently, but the sentiment would likely be the same in any case. It especially speaks to me because I've lately been having some quite explicit dreams about someone I've had a crush on for years--both of her from years ago and of her as a considerably more mature woman. It's not something I would act on even if I could (we're both married) but, damn, they are quite intense dreams.

Anyway, scored you a five. Nice to see you posting again.

Tzara, motoric and archaic is just my natural voice. :)

To me, this was sad but beautiful. I love that first line, and the last...I could feel the yearning. Such a good write. 🙌