All Comments on 'The Place Where'

omg, this is SOOO depressing, poor girll!!! :((( 5 stars.

"The place where, I called you out on your lies."

Also, perhaps lose some of the commas, including the one in the above line.

Five.

You could afford to lose a few commas. Otherwise lovely. Keep posting.

and keep some sense of form and rhythm. Nicely done. S.O

Whether it will help?

Edna St,Vincent Millay ends a sonnet about loss:

[...] entering with relief some quiet place

Where never fell his foot or shone his face

I say, "There is no memory of him here!"

And so stand stricken, so remembering him!

5d

Sad. Very sad.