All Comments on 'Under The Moon Above'

That was really good, 29!

But, might I ask, why would the creator look away?

It was wonderful.

Thanks for this interesting question, Asirenn. Up till now I didn't see the simile of moon <-> eye of the creator. Quite an inspiring thought. I think I let this idea revolve a bit in my head.

My subtle feeling about this was more like Cupido looking down to see if his little plots turn out well. The rose-colored Eye of Seduction taking a glimpse, then moving on to the next newly fallen in love.

I'm not too fond of the idea of 'all knowing, all seeing, all the time'. I think our human like gods, or vice versa?, are like we are, bored after some time, looking for some new distraction. Hence, the rise and set of sun and moon.

Once again, thanks for your feedback, it made me ponder about my own scribbling.

Hope you like the 'sequels' as well, referring to some other eyes.

I like the way you allude to sex. The line "movement without travel" grabbed me, it nicely characterizes sex.

The climax moment didn't really excite me though, but I suppose its a pretty subjective thing.

I like your work.

witnesses the act of intercourse with all foreplay noted. TK U MLJ LV NV

Thanks for your comment, williamesquire.

I hope Jamiroquai will forgive me for twisting the name of their third album and use it for this lewd little experiment.

I'm actually a fan of the 'the journey is the reward'-idea, maybe that's why the climax fell a bit short for this couple's first time. I hope it's not too disappointing for now, but I'm sure those two will walk the path of lovemaking with more confidence over time.

Elegantly written allusion of physical love, a gorgeous piece.