All Comments on 'Unwinding in the Dark'

Thanks for sharing.

I do like that the verses also work pretty well with lines in reversed order.

A few nice little twists could provide an alternative to accompany this poem, like a reflection in a crazy mirror:

and final is that joy

a chaos swirl

of purest sweet want

I have no idea, but these two might have. Well played but even more importantly: well done! Perfect palindromic pleasure.

I don't think I've ever seen that done before at that length. It must have taken some mental gymnastics to work the lines out both ways as you wrote it. Even though the meter stayed the same, it actually "felt" like a rise and then a decline to me. (Or maybe I"m just easily influenced by the title, which was perfect.)