All Comments on 'A Big Ass Woman with My Husband'

That was just wrong on so many levels I don't know where to start.

Love the concept, but the writing is not good. Not to be rude, but is English your second language? No flow to the writing.

Story’s hot..I’m a high-earning professional and my total weakness is our (weekly) big-assed housekeeper..She wears the tightest cheap jeans over her bulbous ass which I’m always hopelessly staring at. I always make an effort to talk with her but during these little chats she always eventually starts fussing with her bra straps which are necessarily wide because of her massive tits, and always covered with lace. I think she understands that I could be pretty easily seduced..Hope you write more about this particular bbw. Thinking of our housekeeper’s bra straps and getting very hard..

Wow. The force of stupidity is strong with this writer. I thought I'd seen it all, you proved me wrong. Things really can get worse. 1*

So what's the point? She gets mad, but doesn't do anything.. Why would anyone do that to themselves.

Stupid. “ I arrived and knocked on the door (Andrea opened it).”. It’s her house, why did she knock?

The problem I had here wa the "I decided to go to work that day and the days following, You also said to finish this story, then, I will continue to tell what happens. You need to decide where you want the story to go. Me I would have left it at I went to work the rest of the week knowing what was going on. Then In chapter two , (I decided to call in again to watch from the window and I was dripping wet agin then all of a sudden the back door opens and she orders me inside) from there your story can go in many dirctions, one wifey could now come home after work and first clean out the maid and second clean the all while paying the maid. just some suggestions.

Where the hell did you come up with those ridiculous tags? Who makes up these words? Story just sucks.

yes, English is my second language, that's why I still don't flow with the words. thanks for your comments

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This could be so much better if written by someone else, the writing is disjointed and lacking emotion and substance. It’s just coarse.

It's okay for a first story. Use the feedback you are receiving to improve and continue writing.

Good start. Keep at it. You need more detail and more editing and you will get better.